This is from my first in-class essay. The first part of the paragraph shows how my logic and argument is not clear in my analysis.The reasons for this is because I am not specific and reasonable enough to make a clear argument. This happens because I didn't even know my thesis statement was very weak. Although, I know that if my thesis statement was specific and reasonable, I still don't believe that my argument will be clear because I don't really know what to say, but I can provide evidence to my argument. I don't know why I didn't do that. It may have help my argument be a little bit more clear if I just use to back up my analysis because occasionally I really have a hard time explaining my ideas. I do have a lot of outside experiences with people, although I did not remember using it to help me write my paper due to the fact that I don't usually do this in all the essays I write. Now, I know that using evidence in my paper is very beneficial and useful in whatever type of essays I write, after knowing that I have to be evident in my essay and I will always use it in my future essays or any type of writing that I have to write for a class. In addition, in the second paragraph, it even says how I wasn't very specific and how I did not demonstrate how writing connect to mindset concepts. All of this is because I don't really know what I am going to say due to the fact that I don't have much ideas in my mind. I occasionally have a very hard time of being very specific in my writing, but I don't see that as a big problem because I know that I can be more specific, in order to make my ideas be more clear. I mean this does not happen in every essays I write. i know that by becoming more specific, my ideas and argument will be stronger to make the reader interested and continue to read my essays and if I am specific, it just makes my whole essay very weak. However, I was not suppose to give a brief summary of the article "Brainology" by Dweck but I did it anyway. I also realize how I did not clearly mention how writing connects to growth mindset when I write, even though I did states how having growth mindsets can be applied to my writing skills. I just didn't know why I didn't do that. Now, I see why my argument are very weak because I don't talk much about writing. I just talk about why having growth mindset is very important to writing. I know that I can prevent this from happening by being more cautious and reading my essays over if I have to. I feel that I could have done a little bit more better in this essay, even though I did not follow the essay prompt. This is the reasons why I did not do so well and got a very low grade on my essay, which is a C+ because I did not follow the essay prompt.
This is my fourth in-class essay, which is the second in-class essay that I have done for the whole semester. This in-class essay was not as bad as the first in-class essay because I got a better grade than the first in-class essay I did, which was a B. I am very happy about it that I have improved. There isn't much of a problem in this essay than the other one I did because I actually followed the essay prompt, which is good. In the first part of the essay, there were comments about how the ideas in the essay are connected to Hooks, which was not such a big problem because I did not clearly states whose ideas it was. It was my ideas, not Hooks. I know that I could have done better than that. Making my ideas confuse to my readers is not good because they will just think that it is an weak essay and I don't that to keep on happening by being more cautious about what I write when I write and even after when I am done with my essay. I know that making this little mistake can hurt my grade a lot, which is not good. In addition, there is another problem with my connections of Rodriguez to others articles I have mention in my essay, which I didn't even realize what I did wrong. I was going to show how Rodriguez experiences in class with the teacher reveals how important having critical thinking the education system is with Hooks and Friere's article. The reasons for this is that I wasn't clear enough on what I am saying, even though I know what I am thinking, which I did not see as a big problem of writing a poor essays. This always happens to me in every essays I write, even though I still get a decent grade. I don't think that I can change the way I write as much as much as I can change the way I think because the way I think and write are not the same, which is the reasons why it can be very hard for me to write clear ideas in my essay, although I can try. However, overall, it was a good essay and I am glad that I had done better than the first in-class essay.
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This is from my discourse community research paper. I was very impressed that I got a very good grade on this research paper because I thought my research paper was not that good. I thought my analysis was very weak with my connections to John Swales article, but it was alright because I have a feeling that it was very general, but it wasn't. In regards to this, I am very happy that I had tried to make the connections because I really don't have any ideas of how to connect my articles to Swales, but it turn out that I had made good connections. Its always best to try than to not try because you never know what will happen. I got this idea from Elbow's article, "Desperation Writing." In addition, I also uses Gee's article, "What is Literacy?" to help me make my connections of how reading and interpreting print is very important of becoming a neonatal nurse because she states how reading and interpreting print is very important than just reading symbols. This was a very good connections because being a neonatal nurse, you can't just read symbols, you need to know how to interpret print. I did whatever I can to try to make a great connections with Gee's article, even though it can be hard because the more I try, the more I can be successful. This was such a very hard paper to write for the whole semester because it was a research paper, but I manage to get it done successfully and I am very proud of myself for the hard work that I have done.